SAT写作官方样题高分范文：Let there be dark（1）

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Sample Student Essays of “Let There Be Dark.” ©2012 by Los Angeles Times. Originally published December 21, 2012.

Scores: 211

In “Let there be dark,” Paul Bogard talks about the importance of

darkness.

Darkness is essential to humans. Bogard states, “Our bodies need darkness to

produce the hormone melatonin, which keeps certain cancers from developing, and

our bodies need darkness for sleep, sleep. Sleep disorders have been linked to

diabetes, obesity, cardiovascular disease and depression and recent research

suggests are main cause of “short sleep” is “long light.” Whether we work at

night or simply take our tablets, notebooks and smartphones to bed, there isn’t

a place for this much artificial light in our lives.” (Bogard 2). Here, Bogard

talks about the importance of darkness to humans. Humans need darkness to sleep

in order to be healthy.

Animals also need darkness. Bogard states, “The rest of the world depends on

darkness as well, including nocturnal and crepuscular species of birds, insects,

mammals, fish and reptiles. Some examples are well known—the 400 species of

birds that migrate at night in North America, the sea turtles that come ashore

to lay their eggs—and some are not, such as the bats that save American farmers

billions in pest control and the moths that pollinate 80% of the world’s flora.

Ecological light pollution is like the bulldozer of the night, wrecking habitat

and disrupting ecosystems several billion years in the making. Simply put,

without darkness, Earth’s ecology would collapse...” (Bogard 2). Here Bogard

explains that animals, too, need darkness to survive.

This response scored a 2/1/1.

Reading—2: This response demonstrates some comprehension of Bogard’s text.

Although this essay consists almost entirely of two quotations taken directly

from the passage, the writer does show an understanding of two of Bogard’s main

points—darkness is crucial to humans and to animals—by selecting and briefly

summarizing two important lines of text. However, the writer demonstrates no

deeper understanding of the passage’s main ideas or important details. Overall,

this response demonstrates partially successful reading comprehension.

Analysis—1: The response demonstrates no understanding of the analytical

task. The writer does not attempt to analyze Bogard’s use of evidence,

reasoning, or stylistic or persuasive elements. Instead, the writer merely cites

two sentences from the passage, and offers a brief restatement of each point.

Overall, this paper demonstrates inadequate analysis.

Writing—1: This essay demonstrates little cohesion and inadequate skill in

the use and control of language. The essay begins with a very broad central

claim (In “Let there be dark,” Paul Bogard talks about the importance of

darkness) but otherwise lacks a recognizable introduction and conclusion. The

writer’s two main ideas are separated into two separate paragraphs, but because

there is little original writing here, there is no clear evidence of the

writer’s ability to logically order or advance ideas. There is also little

evidence of the writer’s ability to vary sentence structure. Overall, this essay

does not provide enough evidence of writing ability to warrant a score higher

than a 1.