【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思小作文详解14：组合图形题

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今天来看一篇小作文---组合图形。题目如下：

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and

water consumption in two different countries.

首先讲一下如何描述组合图形，以下是Simon的建议：

Here are some tips for writing about 2 charts, graphs or tables:

1. Introduction

Write one sentence, but introduce each chart separately e.g. "The first bar

chart shows..., and the second chart illustrates..."(第一段用一句话分别介绍两个图形，如第一个图说明了…,

and 第二个图说明了…)

2. Summary of main points

Write 2 sentences. If the information in the charts is not connected, find

one main point or general trend for each chart. If the charts are connected, try

to make comparisons.(第二段写两句话。如果两个图形信息不相关，描述每个图形的主要趋势。如果相关，尝试做比较)

3. Main body paragraphs

If the 2 charts are completely different (e.g. a graph and a table), write a

separate paragraph about each.(如果两个图的类型完全不同，为每个图写一段话)

If the charts are the same, and show the same information (e.g. 2 pie

charts), don't describe them separately; the examiner will want to see

comparisons. In this case, you could write one paragraph describing all of the

information, but I still prefer to write 2 paragraphs because it makes the essay

look more

organised.(如果图的类型都一样，信息也相同，如两个饼图，就不要分别描述了;考官想看你能做出比较。这种情况，你可以写一个段落描述所有信息，但是我仍然坚持两段，因为看上去更加条理清晰)

接下来大家按照Simon的指示，写一下今天的作文吧！完成后和范文做比较。

完整范文：

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and

homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of

Congo.

It is clear that global water needs rose significantly between 1900 and 2000,

and that agriculture accounted for the largest proportion of water used. We can

also see that water consumption was considerably higher in Brazil than in the

Congo.

In 1900, around 500km³ of water was used by the agriculture sector worldwide.

The figures for industrial and domestic water consumption stood at around one

fifth of that amount. By 2000, global water use for agriculture had increased to

around 3000km³, industrial water use had risen to just under half that amount,

and domestic consumption had reached approximately 500km³.

In the year 2000, the populations of Brazil and the Congo were 176 million

and 5.2 million respectively. Water consumption per person in Brazil, at 359m³,

was much higher than that in the Congo, at only 8m³, and this could be explained

by the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated land.

(184 words, band 9)

今天先到这儿，下期见！

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