2016年4月2日雅思大作文范文选读：关于多元文化利弊

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本范文是一位老外的手笔，注意不是雅思考官。但用词地道，行文的结构非常地吻合雅思作文的标准。全文是4段式，共300字，可以说是考官眼中的妥妥的高分作文的样子。

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Task：

Multicultural societies, where people of different ethnic groups live

together, can bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do

you agree or disagree?

多元文化的社会，不同种族的人生活在一起，能给一个国家带来更多的利益。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?

参考范文

It is believed that multicultural environments bring many advantages for many

people, since the variety of races, cultures and traditions will make the

country become unique and attractive. Although, multicultural societies have

some negative issues, but I do believe that the positive sides are greater than

the negative ones.

On the one hand, countries that have multicultural communities have some

similar problems. Firstly, it is common that discrimination would have been the

main issue. Some groups of people feel that their races are the most superior

one; therefore they would underestimate certain kinds of races. Secondly, there

is always a debate about religious activities, as some groups might have extreme

faith in their religions and would annoyed other believes. One of the classic

examples would be about the debate of religion in Israel between the Jewish and

the Palestinian, which have caused so many casualties.

Despite of all the drawbacks, multiculturalisms will bring many advantages

for the government and the people, if they are well managed. Multicultural

societies makes the city become alive and fascinating, as some sides of city

shown Asiatic cultures, while on the other side it show Western civilizations.

This situation makes the city become unique, and would attract tourists from

many parts of the world. As a result, it will boost the tourism industry, create

a lot of employments and generate income tax for the governments. There are many

multicultural cities that are well known, such as Sydney, Toronto and Singapore

and they are considered as advanced cities, due to the proper management of its

local government.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that multicultural environment has its own

advantages and disadvantages. In my point of view, I do believe that

multicultural societies have more benefits than its drawbacks, if they are

managed properly by the government.

结构分析：

全文采用四段式，作者立场是pro-benefits

导入段：2句。立场鲜明，并运用了paraphrase方式，交代了自己的全文观点。

主体段1：4句。主要讲述了多元文化的drawbacks。组成：主题句+观点1+观点2+例子。

主体段2: 5句。论述了多元文化的benefits。组成上：主题句+观点1+观点2+观点3+例子。

总阶段：2句。总结。重申整个立场，多元文化必然有其利弊，但只要政府运作得当，坚信是利大于弊。整个立场很稳固。