【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思小作文详解10：柱状图

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Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。易伯华的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天给大家带来一篇小作文。相信很多同学在写小作文的时候有很多问题想问Simon，易伯华老师帮大家整理了Simon和学生间的问答，以供参考：

1) Can I start my introduction like this: "It is on a line graph playing out

over a 60 year time period that one sees..."?

No. That sentence looks very strange to me as a native speaker, and it won't

impress the examiner. Just stick to the simple approach that I recommend in my

task 1 lessons.

点评：大家千万不要随意创造新句型，因为很可能后果就是对于native speaker来说很陌生。

2) What will happen if my overview paragraph is different from what the

examiner would write for an overview?

I tell my students to choose two main or general points for their overview

(summary) paragraph. There are usually more than two main points to choose from,

so don't worry about whether the examiner would choose something different. If

your overview sentences summarise the information well, you'll be fine.

点评：按照Simon的指示，在overview/summary段落写多于两个中心句，只要你总结信息到位，则不必担心和examiner写得不同。

3) Is writing task 1 less important than task 2?

Yes. Task 1 is worth one third of your writing score. Task 2 is worth two

thirds.

点评：分数比重小作文占三分之一，大作文三分之二。然而大家并不能对小作文掉以轻心。

4) Can I write more than 150 words?

Yes. There is no maximum word count.

点评：无字数上限要求，然而时间关系，大家写160~180足够。

5) Is every word counted, even words like "a"?

Yes. All words are counted, even small words like "a" and "of".

点评：短的单词也是单词呀!

今天要分析的小作文主题非常有趣，Simon看到后觉得很有可能用于雅思考试。大家先来看一下题目，想想你会怎样描述：

完整范文：Note: I've underlined some good phrases.

The bar chart shows the number of hot dogs and buns eaten in 15 minutes by

the winners of ‘Nathan’s Hot Dog Eating Contest’ in Brooklyn, USA between 1980

and 2010.

It is noticeable that the number of hot dogs and buns eaten by winners of the

contest increased dramatically over the period shown. The majority of winners

were American or Japanese, and only one woman had ever won the contest.

Americans dominated the contest from 1980 to 1996, and the winning number of

hot dogs and buns consumed rose from only 8 to around 21 during that time. 1983

and 1984 were notable exceptions to the trend for American winners. In 1983 a

Mexican won the contest after eating 19.5 hot dogs, almost double the amount

that any previous winner had eaten, and 1984 saw the only female winner, Birgit

Felden from Germany.

A Japanese contestant, Takeru Kobayashi, reigned as hot dog eating

champion for six years from 2001 to 2006. Kobayashi’s winning totals of around 50

hot dogs were roughly double the amount that any previous winner had managed.

However, the current champion, American Joey Chestnut, took hot dog eating to

new heights in 2009 when he consumed an incredible 68 hot dogs and buns in the allotted 15 minutes.

大家仔细看一下Simon标注下划线的这些短语，背诵并掌握其用法。今天先到这儿，下期见!

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